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Grade: C

WWW: Very clear, concise handwriting that include some theory
EBI: Last questions need re-doing, doesn't really focus on editing. Question 1, add a paragraph talking about the props used.

LR:
In the short extract of the usual suspects,  the props used were well suited to the type of character being presented. The more dominant character being showed wore a long black cloak with a black hat. This made it very difficult for the audience to see who the person was which made him seem quite suspicious. It also creates a sense of mystery as we do not know what he is up to at this point in the clip and so it keeps the audience intrigued. In addition, the weaker character presented with a high angle shot sitting on the floor was also seen wearing dark clothing which made him seem suspicious. It can also tell the audience that as its set in the night and they are wearing dark clothing, they are up to something no good as they'll be able to camouflage with the background. Furthermore, in the middle of the clip, there was a gun presented which instantly tells the audience that they have either killed someone or is going to kill someone.